Comments on: The Cold Gate Clan https://www.tribality.com/2017/05/23/the-cold-gate-clan/ D&D / Role Playing Tue, 23 May 2017 21:34:01 +0000 hourly 1 https://wordpress.org/?v=7.1.2 By: Jesse https://www.tribality.com/2017/05/23/the-cold-gate-clan/#comment-2892 Tue, 23 May 2017 21:07:00 +0000 http://www.tribality.com/?p=20240#comment-2892 In reply to Jamie Van Doren.

You’re right. In one place it needs a bit more parallelism to make it read smoother. I’ll fix that in a bit.

]]> By: Jamie Van Doren https://www.tribality.com/2017/05/23/the-cold-gate-clan/#comment-2891 Tue, 23 May 2017 19:24:00 +0000 http://www.tribality.com/?p=20240#comment-2891 Hi, Jesse. I haven’t read all the way through but there is some interesting stuff here. I also wanted to call your attention to several typos l throughout the article. It might be worth another read through and a bit of editing. From a grammatical perspective there are some odd phrasings and some of the word choices probably take away from the overall quality of the ideas/story you’re trying to present. Not bashing you at all. I just figured you’d want to know – especially about the typos. 🙂

]]> By: Manos Ti https://www.tribality.com/2017/05/23/the-cold-gate-clan/#comment-2887 Tue, 23 May 2017 15:00:00 +0000 http://www.tribality.com/?p=20240#comment-2887 Nice. There are obvious influences in there, but this is not a bad thing.

I wonder these detecting devices what kind of artifacts they are. In my setting there are some similar artifacts that detect the use of arcane magic, but they are huge (something like radars of the 50’s).

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